Writing about a hook

this week my literacy is learning about putting an hook inside a writing.Well I made one with my narrative writing about volcanoes. So my hook that I choose to write is a Question.

Have you ever heard about volcanoes? Well there are hundreds of volcanoes around the world and one day 2 boys and one girl went to a volcano in 1956 of feb 30th.Their names are robert and sam and julie.When Julie and sam went to find something to eat. Robert decided to jump off the volcano.But lucky there was a long stick that was hunging.So Robert hung on to the stick about 1 hour. After 1 hour Sam and Julie arrived. Than Julie said to Sam “ where’s Robert ” she shouted. Then Robert shouted and said “I’m here help me”. So Julie and Sam help him up and then they had Something to eat .So they Live happily ever after.

PES signs

Taraia volcano Narrative

Narrative Writing

         

WALT: identify the key features of a narrative.

Write a narrative (which will then go onto your blog), that tells the story discussed in class.

PRE-WRITING:

START WRITING HERE:

One year ago there were to volcano and their names were jack and rose.They had

smoke on their heads. They lived in Mount wellington.

After there was lava coming out of jake's head.

There were clouds. They were having a last  conversation before they Explode

jack jack attack

The short is based on the baby, Jack-Jack. From The 

Incredibles, the audience knows that Jack-Jack's babysitter 

Kari McKeen started experiencing difficulty with ..

and he turned into fire then the mum had to put water on the

baby.

mike's new car

Walt: identify the key features of a narrative text.

Walt: use was/were correctly in our writing.