taraia Writing - Show Don't Tell
Warren Weir was rubbing his hands carefully at the starting line. He was feeling confident and nervous. He knelt on the track and got ready to race. They waited for a sec. Then the starting pistol shot. Then the racers ran their fastest. Warren Weir was running his fastest trying to come 1st place. but when he crossed the finish line he felt proud of himself that he came third.
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ReplyDeleteHey Taraia, well done for posting this creative description about the picture! What a cool descriptive sentence, 'Warren Weir was rubbing his hands carefully at the starting line.'
ReplyDeleteIt looks like it doesn't look like the paragraph finishes though. Maybe the picture overlaps your final word(s).
Keep doing that good work!
Sorry Taraia, I am some technical issues here and made some errors in my comment...
Delete*'It doesn't look like the paragraph finishes' is what I meant to say. Looking forward to seeing your next post.
Thank you Mr Dow
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